Thank goodness Blogger is up and running today. Haven't been able to get on for the past couple of days and it's a huge relief to find everything working normally today.
Gotta say I'm getting addicted to posting out these little snippets for Six Sentence Sunday. Lol, no one said it gets this addictive, something you just have to do, and that you wait for every week. I hope these tidbits make you peeps happy too. :)
So, without further ado, here's today's six. Remember last week how Kelsey dropped the bombshell as to why she was back into Stellan's life? Well, here follows a snip of the conversation that follows, deep into Stellan's POV, after Kelsey has confirmed that she gave birth to their daughter. For the purpose of Six Sentences, I have tweaked it a little so the gist of the scene is conveyed.
Enjoy!
'...For eighteen years, he hadn’t known he had a child. She was a grown girl now, a young woman, who had just given birth herself to a preemie.
“Where is she?”
“Gone.”
The word was a whisper that sent pointed knife-edges to slash-dance across his spine.
“She, Sophie,” Kelsey’s voice tore on a sob, “she died.”...'
I always forget to add this, but not today - Find out more about Six Sentence Sunday here and check out all the amazing entries listed up again this week.
From Mauritius with love,
Zee
53 comments:
Oh my, I just teared up. Poignant and tragic.
AHHHHH. Z, you can't leave us like that.
Oh my gosh, Zee, that's strong writing.
Wow, an emotion-packed snippet. Excellent job, and the last sentence really packs a punch.
Ugh no! Don't leave us hanging. It's so tragic, I need to know more.
Graylin,
Very tragic indeed. My heart goes out to Stellan every time I think of him.
Thanks for dropping by!
Sorry Rebecca. :) More next week, maybe?
Hugs!
Thanks Sandy! I'm working towards that aim.
Thank you, Cate! I'm glad the emotion came across.
Liia, more next week, I promise!
Thanks for dropping by. :)
Very emotional. Good SSS.
yes it is addictive - emotional write
Tragic! I want to read more!
Thanks Cherie!
Sue, I totally need my 'fix' every Sunday now, lol.
Carolyn, I promise to have more next week. :)
Lovely emotional filled six.
Thanks Viviane!!
Oh, shocking. So sad for him that he never knew and now will never know his daughter. Hope he gets a chance with the granddaughter.
Touching scene, and well written. I like the fact that Kelsey and Stellan are older. A similar situation between long-lost lovers occurs in my book!
Taryn, yes - it's a heartbreaker that he won't ever know his daughter. But life is about second chances too, and their grandaughter is one such opportunity.
Thanks Sandy. Yes, both of them are older and world-wise, though they come from two different social universes. I love long-lost lovers' stories. :)
A real heart-string tugger. Great six.
Oh, this is so sad--and what a great set up for a rekindled love story. The reader in my weeps, the author is nodding her head.
I hope he's misinterpreted, and she's not dead... Too sad!
just rip my heart out and stomp all over it. That's powerful stuff
How sad! I hope the implied information isn't true.
Oh, how heartwrenching.
Heartbreaking, tragic... a perfect nightmare--which lets you know, it's well written.
Good job.
Best,
Allure
Sad six :(
Oh, Zee..how sad xx and my, my, my.. pointed knife-edges to slash-dance across his spine love that line!
My goodness. So much sadness in a few words. Nicely done, even if it did make me cry.
How sad... a powerful six, indeed.
That's so sad... Wow. Great six, Zee!!
Sad. To find then maybe lose. Great six
wow! I wanted to shake my netbook as yell NOW WHAT!
Thank you, Ginger!
Gem, I had to force myself to put them across this situation. I think I fell in love with Stellan at this precise moment.
Jessica, unfortunately it's the truth. Yes, sad indeed.
Jayel, it's a hard blow, innit? Anyone in his shoes would reel.
Felicia, unfortunately their daughter did die. Her death and its consequences are what bring them together again.
Susanna, it tore me up to write this scene.
Thanks, Allure. :)
Misa, my heart breaks every time I re-read this scene.
Thanks JoAnne. It's heartwrenching, innit? I so feel for that poor man.
Dianne, sorry to have me you actually cry. But yes, I wanted this scene to be gut and heart wrenching - glad it came through.
Thank you, Kim!
Thanks Lex!
Lindsay, exactly - his daughter was just beyond his reach for a few minutes, only to be snatched away again.
@the cautionary tale,
Oops! I hope the netbook is okay.:) I'll have more coming next week.
So sad and beautifully written. Great six, Zee!
Thanks laynap!
Your writing always makes my heart thump a little faster....so good Zee!
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